Wednesday, November 10, 2010

~chhondo- Boddho~

raater kahini- vebechilam naam
tarpor likhte vule gelam...

sopno vongo- nirjhorer ekar?
sopno nei sopno niye bachar...

ekta duto shobdo aase haate
chhondogulo haray khorcha khaate...

judhho kore shobdo lekha hoy
vabna gulo tobu kuwasamoy...

bodle geche jibon naki ami??
uttor nei, aaj prosnotai daami...

5 comments:

Sourabh said...

It was nice, quiet warm but I felt not quiet to the level you have set earlier. Might be you tried to deal with too many thoughts all simultaneously and not properly arranged. Also was a bit flat in expressing things. Final words-

Starting quiet mysteriously -
"raater kahini- vebechilam naam
tarpor likhte vule gelam..."

Ended quiet fruitfully -
"bodle geche jibon naki ami??
uttor nei, aaj prosnotai daami..."

Surely it's not what I am used to reading from you... Come up with your original self !!! :)

Abhirup Chakrabarty said...

already commented via ym ;) .. and you know what I didn't like about this particular one. :) ...

Nabanita said...

@dadamoni- may be...personally i dnt think i have any level at all :)

yaa too many thoughts were tangled up in my mind...so yaa d expression was a bit haphazard...actually had no plan of writing this one...was sitting blankly openiing the compose page..then suddenly penned down this one...

may be nxt time...will come up something better :) ...if my thoughts get cleared up at all...

Nabanita said...

@abhirup- yaa...but sumtyms even i dnt knw d answr...dats wen even i need to ask question...

absy said...

Nice blog.feel to read ur blog.but what can i do? cant understand that language

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