Tuesday, September 09, 2008

~Khuje Dekha~

Kokhono bristi veja ekla mathe bose
Kokhono ba dhu dhu roddur makha
Duto haat bujhi koto kacha kachi
kokhono ba noishobder ojanay vese....

niribili eka pothe haanta
ba tomar chokhe chokh rakha...
kobitar khata niye vaabi
bastob naki chupkotha?

pashapashi koto poth chola;
kohkono ba sudhu bose thaka...
aadh khaoa coffee cup chhuye...
sporshe te valobasha makha.

dekhecho ki bhirer majhe khuje
valobasha hariyeche kotha?
hoyto ba sudhu lukochuri
Chhuye dekha kichhu govirota...

10 comments:

Abhirup Chakrabarty said...

chupkotha word ta tor khub favorite...and use-tao prottek kobitaye khub shundor..

toke bolechhilam je poetess-er lekha kokhono permanently theme jaye na..it's just a writer's block...duration ta time to time change kore..

About the poem, wonderfully composed.kobitar feel ta khub-i sningdho...eta kalke ghum chokheo bolechhilam..[:)]..and as usual, emotions gulo khub-i bastob, prokot and shundor bhabe phute uthechhe..

Very well written dear. Onek din pore ekta detailed critic dilam[:P]..

Nabanita said...

hmmm.....yaa Chupkotha shobdota amaar vaari priyo....chup kore thaka& kotha bola 2to bepar eksathe bojhay ei shobdota...

amaar besh vaalo legechhe poem ta likhe....chhondobodhho type er...

r onekdin por eto boro review debar jonno thnx[:)]

Abhirup Chakrabarty said...

immidiately withdraw kor..noile del korbo!![:x]

Nabanita said...

okk [NO] THNX

Abhirup Chakrabarty said...

Good[>:D<][:-*]

haan poem ta darun shundor bhabe chhondoboddho!!!well written.

Sourabh said...

It's lovelyyyyyyy description of a common feeling dat comes sometimes in people's mind. The best part I liked about the poem is a dreamy description of so many little common things.
I liked these lines nostalgically veryyy beautiful --

"pashapashi koto poth chola;
kohkono ba sudhu bose thaka...
aadh khaoa coffee cup chhuye...
sporshe te valobasha makha."


The best part about your poetry is an amazing depth of each and every line. It seems to pour a lot of feeling with so little words.

Great work of art buddy, keep this flag flying.

ABHISHEK said...

poem ta to xcellent,, seta agei bolechi... in addition,, er kotha gulo ajkal khub kom lokei feel kore... tor to poetic mind ache,,seta agei dekhechi,, ei poem ta pore toke aro natural bole mone holo...
grt work.. keep it up.... and congrats again about d BIG FM matter.....

Nabanita said...

thank u so much dadamoni [:)]

thnx alot abhishek

atreyee said...

khuub shundor..n i hrd it got dedicated to smone :)gr8 :)

Nabanita said...

thnx alot tina :)

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