The flood of emotion…
Has started again;
While I was walking…
Down the memory lane.
It seemed a long ago…
I traveled this way;
With no one to call friend…
With no place to stay!!!
I then found a new lane;
Where I wanted to die;
Where I wanted to survive;
Where I became insane!!!
And all my emotions died…
But I survived!!!
The ebb of emotion
With no love…only rage…
With less smile…lesser courage.
The memory lane…
Where I lost my soul;
There I found light today…
All colours…but not grey.
I found it back;
The rainbow of emotions…
The shining smile…
The raining tears…
The warm affection…and care.
With tears rolling down
I found myself standing
At the graveyard of my past…
Staring at a new dawn…
A new beginning atlast
30 comments:
"The lost graveyard will remain lost/
Won't let it come back at any cost."
This is my pledge.
Wonderfully written...I can get the emotions involved here(echoes most of mine[:)])...and yes...its ruddy brilliant to see the poetess at her work again[:)]
I simply loved this one.
err...thnx[:P]
"Won't let it come back at any cost."
hmm....i know..still...sum fears do come back...
but i knw...
past will never make a come back[:)]
i trust u
thnx kisher?[:x][:x]
aar well...I guess you believe in "Carpe Diem".."Live The Moment" i.e...aar trust me..there's nothing to fear...[:)]
yups..i believe in present...thats why i'm here only..else...i cudnt able to survive...u knw it all..taai na????for me present is a present[:)]
Hmm...i know....& let's keep past as a past..let's not let past's ugly head creep up(not even in your wildest dreams)[:)].
Am your present & future.THE END[:)].
eeehhhhhhhhh..kemon bolchhe dekho...
kemon abar bollam!?![:o][:o].ami ja bolar sposhto boli[;)]..Always!![:)]
weird writing...i love it...am not as good as u though
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thnx
No formalities. I aspire to write about pain...so explicitly that it would bring about tears in any reader's eye. wish me luck.
@VINAY-Itz good to explore pain..but dont become a saddist...
thanks....Is it really obvious that its for love?
I actually had a fight that day with mom and my girl. so i wanted it to be ambiguous.
thanks for the comments.
My, my. Well written. Short lines say so much!
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Part 2 of Babui's Question has been released.
I sure hope I got the mannerisms of that era properly.
@ vinay- wen did i xactly say that itz only abt luv??u tok me in a wrong way..one can become saddist in many way...not only abt luv..& dont we luv our parents?we do...then?
@prince- hey thnx for ur comments...yups...u did capture that era in a beautiful way....luvd it infact....
Well said...The aim is to write "A" poem with pain as the ulterior motive. Not Only that kinda poems. I have a question for you. Can you write a rhyme on cue? Impromptu?
P.S. sorry about the dalay...exams and a little problem with my internet. am back. And I can never say enough of this...thanks for the comments
And my friend, your about me section is simply spell bounding....please tell me you wrote it.
@vinay-oh yes,i can write a rhyme on cue? Impromptu?
& welcum bak :)
oh and yes...my "ABOUT ME"..well just chk out my blog once..u can see a poem called "I AM....."..my about me is that poem only..which is written by me ofcourse....
& thnx 4 d comments:)
I absolutely adore this "I am" rhyme. It's the best I've ever come across. No flattery intended.
And that's quite a talent...to write on cue.
Another question now...is it important for a rhyme to...er...rhyme?
hope u get me.
Thanks for the comments..and yes I am back.
& I dont know whether itz important for a rhyme to...er...rhyme or not...
but...I like to write like this...
& thnx 4 appreciating my "I AM...."
New posts because I was off for a while...i'd thought of this when i was offline. What u doing? Online mosta the time?
I take it that you have not read the new post yet. Waiting for your comments. And the reason I post so regularly is because I'm honing my skills.
To answer your question, yes I am in love...as the song goes...truly madly deeply. And I accept your criticism with humbleness but I beg to differ. I just wanna tell her that I'd do anything for her. "Joker" here being an euphemism for something low and cheap...I wouldn't mind doing that too...for her..."Anything for you" is what I'm telling her.
And to me she is already a princess. I just want her to feel that way too. Which is why I say, you be mine and I shall make you the happiest woman on earth.
All material things are circumlocutions...To put it short all I'm saying is She gives me so much happiness and I shall give her the same.
whew! sorry bout the long comment....it flows with emotion. Do come back tomorrow evening...I've been working on a new verse all day. Been perfecting it. Thanks to you, I now have the motivation to improvise because I have someone going through those lines i churn out thanks a million gazillion.
It was time
To sink or to swim...
The Linkin Park influence?
My apologies for flooding this comments section. Today I had the pleasure(or is it pain?) of going through your blog for quite a while.
Emotions run high. I like the voltage and the electricity. I liked the love and the hatred that you couldn't give. Is this the person who asked me not to fall in love with pain?
"...person forget all your feelings... because in the end... Career does matter... heart doesn't..."
It doesn't? I think it does. Your heart can decide your career. And personally, if I had to choose between the two, I'd choose heart.
hey vinay..thnx 4 flooding...well...there was a time when i was ahuge fan of Linkin Park..but after that focus had been changed...though i still ove them....that line is not influenced by any...infact that line was dedicated to my love...my boyfriend...who helped me alot...
then ur next comment...well..u knw i never fell in luv with my pain..infact i hated them...but i had chosen the path of pain...u can call it sarcasm...which i did with myself...i hate PAIN..whether itz mine or itz others...& ya...most of my poems r based on my feelings...(except "lover or traitor"..this poem was an xperiment)..so sumtimes i was in pain....i've written down sumthng..& my favourite one was composed when i was in immense pain...but then...i've overcome pain...coz...after all...i hate pain...& i wanted to defeat it...:)
1. I loved LP too. But their new album aint that good. I've also moved on to better bands since.
2. Then I guess we should avoid saying we FELL in love. We soar high. I share your feeling. This was an experimentation too. I have a fully satisfying love life too.
3. Reading your blog was like taking a literary tour. I must say I learnt a few things.
4. I like those poems which have not more than two words a line. Thats really wonderful.
5. Thanks for commenting(and promising to do so) without fail. I admit I've been looking forward for them after every post.
6. I cant wait to start working on the next one. When can I expect a new post from you?
7. Sorry for these long posts. I know they look lake e mail from a relative...lol. Can't help it.
I failed to put it that way....I should have said I like your style of writing.
You are right...the only line I learnt in bengali from a close friend of mine in school was how to say "I am a fool"...haha...Ami akta boka or something..so i'll wait for your english posts...hope my net don get conked before that.
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Hey!!! I am so glad to see you back! You have no idea how much my blog misses u...see how empty and desolate my comments section is? When'll u be free?? Please do visit...I've saved a lotta drafts so I can release them slowly. And get ur comments on them. U happen to be the only regular visitor. I know I'm sounding shit desperate and cheap but thats how it is. Do come back asap and comment. I'll be waiting.
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